Not so long ago, I was working on my MA in US History. I quit. I am a professional chemist and was only taking the courses for entertainment (hey, it kept me out of the strip clubs!), and when they ceased to entertain me, I quit.
One of the reasons I quit was disgust at the way that History is written. I'm not talking about the need to obsessively footnote everything, or to find at least three secondary and five primary sources. I'm not even talking about the trend in History to write 'from the bottom up' and try to find a racist / sexist / homophobic angle to every historical event (though this certainly grated on my nerves) or at the very least try to write the History that 'the common man' experienced.
What I'm talking about is writing History so that NOBODY in their right mind would want to read it. Writing that is as dry as burnt toast. Writing that is so convuluted, so full of jargon, so packed with dependent clauses and parentheticals that the average reader would sooner read stereo instructions.(1) Allow me to humbly offer these two passages. The first is the introductory paragraph from the first draft of a paper I wrote about the Cuban Missile Crisis. The second is the introduction from the final draft:
In the early hours of Sunday, October 14, 1962 Air Force Major Richard Heyser climbed aboard his glider-like U-2 aircraft at Edwards Air Force Base in southern California. Few missions in a U-2 could be considered routine. The aircraft operated at altitudes around 70,000 - 80,000 feet where it would be safe from almost any interceptors or surface to air (SAM) missiles. The pilots referred to such high altitudes as “Coffin Corner” because anything more than a seven-mile per hour change in airspeed could either let the aircraft stall and fall from the sky or shake itself apart. Today’s mission had an extra element of danger: Heyser would be flying over the communist island of Cuba as part of an on-going effort to monitor the Soviet military buildup on the island. There had been no flights since August 29, due in part to bad weather and to the fact that among the advanced weapons being emplaced were SA-2 “Guideline” SAMs of the same type believed to have downed Francis Gary Powers’ U-2 over the Soviet Union in May, 1960. The U-2 carried no armament; Heyser could only count on his altitude and defensive maneuvers to protect him if the Soviets decided to fire on him.
My professor asked me if I was a journalist. I decided NOT to be insulted, as I WAS wearing my Fox News Channel ballcap. She told me that the writing, while not bad, was not appropriate for a scholarly paper. After several rewrites, this is what I finally submitted:
In October 1962 the United States discovered that the Soviet Union had started deployment of nuclear missiles on the island of Cuba. For the next thirteen days, the Cuban Missile Crisis unfolded, threatening literally the end of the world. Until recently, the historiography of the crisis has focused on the Kennedy administration and its response to Krushchev’s actions. Recent scholarship, however, has shed light on two critical areas: Khrushchev’s rationale for ordering missiles to Cuba and the role Castro played in the decision. Khrushchev had several different reasons for deploying the missiles, but the most important was to preserve Cuba as a Soviet client state. Contrary to the belief of many Americans that Castro was at best an ignorant pawn and at worst an outright dupe of the Kremlin, he was an active partner in the decision to deploy the missiles and a principal player in the Cuban Missile Crisis.
Though history in general or the Cuban Missile Crisis in particular may not be your cup of tea, which paper do you think you'd WANT to read?
While I appreciate that there are certain stylistic requirements for scholarly work, my feeling is that history SHOULD BE written for the edification and (dare I say it?) entertainment of the average person. Some historians seem to understand this. For example, Barbara Tuchman, Robert Massie and Sir Winston Churchill are historians whose work I have actually enjoyed reading. Unfortunately, most of the 'scholarly' works I had to read in college were FAR from entertaining. Some were downright painful. Consider this passage from one of my textbooks; I assure you that this is far from the worst writing I encountered:
Women have always worked, but until the past century their work has been confined almost entirely to the domestic setting, and it has been for the most part unpaid labor. Women's work was an element in the larger family economy that prededominated in preindustrial society. Although this work proved crucial to fmily subsistence, it also constituted the basis for women's subordinate positition in patriarchal society. In the American colonies, for instance, w0men made substantial contributions to both agricultural production and domestic manufacture; still, married women could not own property, nor could the make contracts on their own. This legal framework reinforced the economic subordination of colonial women; without the means for self-support, women's place was clearly in the home.(2)
See what I mean? Even if I had some bizarre interest in female mill workers in Lowell, Mass., or in female workers in general, I'd be put off by such an introduction. Ick.
What's even more disturbing is that history students are not only taught that this sort of style is desireable, but a more conversational style that 'reads too much like a novel' is outright BAD. In one course, we discussed Queen Elizabeth with reference to the following books:
Garrett Mattingly, The Armada (Boston: Houghton Mifflin, 1959)
Carole Levin, The Heart and Stomach of a King: Elizabeth I and the Politics of Sex and Power (Philadelphia: University of Pennsylvania Press, 1994)
I enjoyed The Armada, which was written in a pleasant, literary style. I could barely stomach Levin's book, which was not only written in a 'scholarly' (i.e. incomprehensible) style, but also made the most bizarre assertions on the flimsiest evidence. Which book did my classmates prefer? You guessed it. Not because they loved Levin's prose, you understand: they just thought that The Armada 'read too much like a novel', implying that it therefore could not possibly be a 'serious' work.
But enough ranting. There's really nothing I can do about the lamentable state of historical writing in American academia. Thus, educating the common man about history will fall to a few 'popular' historians (ALWAYS said with a sneer) and the History Channel.
Too bad.
(1) I am aware that my own writing is often very convuluted and hard to read. I am sorry.
(2) Thomas Dublin, Women at Work: The Transformation of Work and Community in Lowell, Massachusetts, 1826 - 1860, 2nd Ed. (New York: Columbia University Press, 1993), 1.
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